We are focusing on narratives at the moment. This week our WALT has been to SHOW not TELL the reader by using our senses to create vivid descriptions.
Below is an excellent example written by Sean...
SIGHT - As he stepped into the daylight the fresh morning breeze blew through his long, thick, grey hair making it fly for a second. His bristly beard covered his chin and his face was contorted into a nasty scowl.
SOUND - We crept closer when Jack stood on a twig and a crack echoed through the valley, the man twisted around, with amazing speed, pointing his rifle straight above our heads and another crack echoed through the valley as a branch of an old tree snapped as a bullet whistled through the leaves.
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